tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5033201056973534142.post1925351789879400121..comments2023-03-21T18:29:48.699-07:00Comments on Soup's Auntie OxyMoron: Re: Am I Ever Wrong? I Hope So...Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5033201056973534142.post-80695070905608570702011-11-10T08:48:47.447-08:002011-11-10T08:48:47.447-08:00The coherence (the flow from idea to idea) could b...The coherence (the flow from idea to idea) could be better at times. Your paper starts<br />explaining your interest in becoming a scholar; this explanation is fine. Paragraph two (on<br />page two) is a key paragraph because it appears to be stating the three main ideas your<br />paper will develop. The connection between this paragraph and the rest of the paper is not<br />always clear. For instance, on page two the paragraph says, “Three, in the face of<br />overexertion, with anxiety ever rising, I move from subject to subject, adding subgroups of<br />interest as necessary- and always away from my confirmation bias.” However, when I<br />arrive at the third point in your paper, you say, “Thirdly, and this is key, I have never<br />minded being wrong.” You go on to discuss feedback and how you don’t mind being<br />wrong. The connection isn’t clear, and I feel somewhat lost.<br />Your paper has some good basic ideas. However, the connections between some ideas and<br />some parts of the paper could be clearer.-----c plus!!!!! damn.Soup McGeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00755884139895385807noreply@blogger.com